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How can the public transportation in your city be improved?
-> My city's public transportation can be imporoved by many ways.
First, the subway can be made more bigger than before because of lots of citizens.
Second, the bus can be changed to eco friendly for our city's environments.
And also we can install some instruments in our city's transportations more than before.
So I think we can improve my city's transportation by these three or more ways.

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Hi John! These are all good ways to improve a city's public transportation because it is an essential for the economies growth. :)

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My city's public transportation can be imporoved by many ways.
>>My city's public transportation can be improved in many ways.

First, the subway can be made more bigger than before because of lots of citizens.
>> First, the subway can be made more bigger than before because there are a lot of citizens.

Second, the bus can be changed to eco friendly for our city's environments.
>> Second, buses can be changed to eco friendly for our city's environments.

And also we can install some instruments in our city's transportations more than before.
>>Also, we can install some instruments in our city's transportations more than before.

So I think we can improve my city's transportation by these three or more ways.
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