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What do you like to do on the weekend?

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Everyone would like to oversleep on weekend, because they couldn't oversleep on weekdays. So do I. I also want to watch a war movie as World war I or World II through television late at night on Saturday. I used to watch a war movie to release my stress of weekdays. It is rainy day from afternoon of Saturday on these weekends. As you know, it is spring in South Korea. The petals fall when it rains. I hurried to went for Olympic Park to see spring flower with my wife before raining. We can a beautiful scene. There was many kinds of flowers. Cherry blossoms bloomed fully and magnolia was fallen a little unfortunately. We also can meet many forsythias and often azaleas

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Hi Sir Mandeep! Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Here are some of the corrections, but other than that, your answers are great. :0
~ T. Camille

Everyone would like to oversleep on weekend, because they couldn't oversleep on weekdays. 
>> CORRECT!

So do I. 
>> CORRECT!

I also want to watch a war movie as World war I or World II through television late at night on Saturday.
>> I want to watch movies about war, such as World war I or World II in the television on a Saturday night.

I used to watch a war movie to release my stress of weekdays. 
>> I used to watch movie about war to release my stress on weekdays.

It is rainy day from afternoon of Saturday on these weekends.
>> It is usually rainy on Saturday afternoon.

As you know, it is spring in South Korea.
>> CORRECT!

The petals fall when it rains. 
>> CORRECT!

I hurried to went for Olympic Park to see spring flower with my wife before raining. 
>> I hurried to go to the Olympic Park to see spring flowers with my wife before raining. 

We can a beautiful scene.
>> We can see a beautiful scenery.

There was many kinds of flowers. 
>> There were many kinds of flowers. 

Cherry blossoms bloomed fully and magnolia was fallen a little unfortunately. 
>> Cherry blossoms bloomed fully, but unfortunately, a few Magnolias have already fallen.

We also can meet many forsythias and often azaleas
>> We can also see a lot of forsythias and azaleas.
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