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Should there be a limit on how many children there should be in a family?

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If it is limited to our country, I think we don't have to limit the birth of children. In Korea, the birthrate is currently 0.8 and the problem of low birth rate is serious. So governments are thinking about policies to increase the birth rate, but they are not as effective So I don't think there's any limit to the birth rate.

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Hi Steve! I think so too. Now, your country is facing the opposite problem of over population. I hope that the statistics would be balance soon. :) 

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If it is limited to our country, I think we don't have to limit the birth of children. 
>> I don't think we need to have limit in birth rate in our country.

In Korea, the birthrate is currently 0.8 and the problem of low birth rate is serious. 
>>In Korea, the birthrate is currently 0.8 and this is a serious problem. 

So governments are thinking about policies to increase the birth rate, but they are not as effective So I don't think there's any limit to the birth rate.
>>So, the government is thinking about policies to increase the birth rate but they are not as effective.  This is why I don't think that there should be a limit in birth rate. 
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