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What will you do if you didn\'t do your purpose on a business trip?

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I am a software engineer. If I didn't do my purpose on a business trip, it will be a reason, I made a software which has errors or I misunderstood client's requirements. If it happens, I would come back to my office, And I analyze a problem. And I go on a business again. I will get a low evaluation, because of going on business trips twice. But finishing work is more import. The worst situation is making a problem in business trip when I go to other country. I can't come back, although I have problems. I should achieve business trip's goal while a business trip period. If I fail to achieve the goal, I have no choice. These days is better than before, because of the development of It environment.

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Hello Il Hwan,

  Thank you for taking time to answer this question. It only proves that you really wanted to improve in your English skill. Please do check and take note of the corrections for your improvement. I hope it helped you. 

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What will you do if you didn't do your purpose on a business trip?


I am a software engineer. 
>>> CORRECT

If I didn't do my purpose on a business trip, it will be a reason, I made a software which has errors or I misunderstood client's requirements.
>>> If I didn't do my purpose on a business trip because of the following reasons; I made software that has errors or I misunderstood the client's requirements. 

 If it happens, I would come back to my office, And I analyze a problem. And I go on a business again. 
>>> If it happens, I would come back to my office, and I analyze a problem then I'll go back. 

I will get a low evaluation, because of going on business trips twice. But finishing work is more import. 
>>> I will get a low evaluation, because of going on business trips twice but finishing work is more import. 

The worst situation is making a problem in business trip when I go to other country. 
>>> The worst situation is making a problem in a business trip in another country. 

I can't come back, although I have problems. 
>>> For the reason that I can't come back, although I have problems. 

I should achieve business trip's goal while a business trip period.
>>> I should achieve the business trip's goal in the allotted period. 

 If I fail to achieve the goal, I have no choice. 
>>> If I fail to achieve the goal, I have no choice but to make it work and succeed. 

These days is better than before, because of the development of It environment.
>>> These days are better than before, because of the development of the IT environment.
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