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In some societies, more and more people are choosing to live on their own? What are the reasons peop

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People prefer to live alone these days because they seek to freedom and financial security. I think many people have experienced unpleasant situation with their family members. Sometimes, it cause serious conflicts among them. Young people don't want to be bothered by anybody about their life style. However, parents have different opinions about many issues happened at home. These lead people to live alone. There are many pros living alone. Firstly, nobody would bother at home and it can be a nice chance to learn how to cook, do laundry and clean up house. Secondly, people can do anything what they wish without bothering from elderly. But people would feel lonely and would miss food that their mother cooked. In my experience, I had lived alone since 20 years old. I had really hard time especially when I was sick. I really missed my family because my mom always take care of me and provide everything for me. So, if I can go back at that time, I wouldn't live alone.

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Be thankful for what you have; you¡¯ll end up having more. If you concentrate on what you don¡¯t have, you will never, ever have enough.
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People prefer to live alone these days because they seek to freedom and financial security.
>>> People prefer to live alone these days because they seek freedom and financial security.
 I think many people have experienced unpleasant situation with their family members. 
>>> CORRECT
Sometimes, it cause serious conflicts among them.
>>> Sometimes, it causes serious conflicts among them.
 Young people don't want to be bothered by anybody about their life style.
>>>  Young people don't want to be bothered by anybody about their lifestyle.
 However, parents have different opinions about many issues happened at home. 
>>>  However, parents have different opinions about many issues happening at home. 
These lead people to live alone.
>>> CORRECT
 There are many pros living alone. 
>>>  There are many pros in living alone. 
Firstly, nobody would bother at home and it can be a nice chance to learn how to cook, do laundry and clean up house. 
>>> CORRECT
Secondly, people can do anything what they wish without bothering from elderly. 
>>> Secondly, people can do anything they want without being bothered by the elderly. 
But people would feel lonely and would miss food that their mother cooked. 
>>> CORRECT
In my experience, I had lived alone since 20 years old.
>>> CORRECT
 I had really hard time especially when I was sick. 
>>>  I had a hard time especially when I get sick. 
I really missed my family because my mom always take care of me and provide everything for me. 
>>> I really missed my family because my mom always took care of me and provide everything for me. 
So, if I can go back at that time, I wouldn't live alone.
>>> CORRECT
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