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If you could be born in another country, which one would you pick and why?

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I personally want to be born in European countries such as Germany and France. Because Europe is near the Mediterranean Sea, the temperature is always warm, so it will be convenient to live in. And I like soccer, and I want to experience it because Europe likes soccer sports and related business and culture are well established. And I think it would be good to travel because countries around Europe have many tourist attractions

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Hi Steve! Wow that sounds exciting. There are indeed a lot of thing that you can do and experience in that country. It's never too late. You can still migrate there and experience all those things :)

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I personally want to be born in European countries such as Germany and France. 
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Because Europe is near the Mediterranean Sea, the temperature is always warm, so it will be convenient to live in. 
>>It is because Europe is near the Mediterranean Sea so the temperature is always warm which is more convenient to live in. 

And I like soccer, and I want to experience it because Europe likes soccer sports and related business and culture are well established. 
>> I also like soccer and want to experience it in European countries. The business and culture there are well established as well. 

And I think it would be good to travel because countries around Europe have many tourist attractions
>> I think it would be good to travel because countries around Europe have many tourist attractions.
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