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Choosing their own life is independent of their parents and they choose their self.
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LOVELY DAY TO YOU EDEN~! ^^
Be thankful for what you have; you¡¯ll end up having more. If you concentrate on what you don¡¯t have, you will never, ever have enough.
You¡¯re going to go through tough times - that¡¯s life. But I say, ¡®Nothing happens to you, it happens for you.¡¯ See the positive in negative events.
Have a nice day~! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
It is positive trend.
>>> It is a positive trend.
Choosing their own life is independent of their parents and they choose their self.
>>> Choosing their own life is being independent from their parents and they choose it themselves. 
The reason for making their own choose is to stand on their own feet.
>>> The reason why they choose on their own is for them to stand on their own feet.
Living a life of their own choosing makes their feel more proud when something goes well.
>>> Living a life on their own makes them feel more proud when something goes well.
But it is good to ask other people for advice before you make your choosing to live own their own.
>>> But it is good to ask other people for advice before you make your own choice. 
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