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Raising pet is good

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I think raise sing pet gives me to love something and also to love animal. Love animal develop my thinking and love nature, loving pet gives me to spend time more bright so i can fell more sensitive.And last I can be interest in animal. So I can now more about animals. That's the reason why I think raising pet is good

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Hello Jed. Thank you for this.

I think raise sing pet gives me to love something and also to love animal. 
>>> I think raising a pet makes me to love something and also to love animals.        
Love animal develop my thinking and love nature, loving pet gives me to spend time more bright so i can fell more sensitive.
>>>  Loving animals develop my thinking and love for nature. Loving pets helps me spend time more brightly so I can feel more sensitive.       
And last I can be interest in animal. So I can now more about animals. 
>>> And last, I can be interested in animals and know more about animals.       
That's the reason why I think raising pet is good
>>>  That's the reason why I think raising a pet is good.
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