무료 레벨테스트 받고 강사평가 남기면 1,OOO원 쿠폰 즉시 적립!

혹시 사이트에선 찾지 못한 궁금한 점이 있으세요?
남겨주신 이메일을 통해 답변 드리겠습니다.

문의하신 내용이 문자로 발송되오니
연락처를 남겨주세요.
업무시간 월~금 오전9시~오후6시
(점심시간 낮12시~오후1시)

영작교정 게시판

영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
회원님들께 무료로 제공해드리는 부가 서비스로, 전문 분야를 제외한 자유 주제
또는 강사님이 내주시는 과제를 회원님께서 영어로 작성해주시면,
담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

HOMEWORK

작성자: 류*주
2021-03-30 816

회원님의 영작문

Should there be a limit on how many children there should be in a family?
-> I think if there is no special situtation such as low birth rate, we don't have to make any limit about children number in one family.
Because if there are limit about children number in one family, it can cause some problems about the human rights.
Ex) some people didn't want to get children but the gorverment told them to get some children, and it can be problem.
Another ex) some people are poor because of getting lots of children, and it can be another problem about human rights too.
So I think its better to be no limit about children number in one family, if there are no problem about population.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi John! You're right. These kinds of policies are only given to the society if there is a problem in terms of the population. The government should think about it a lot because it will be against human rights. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think if there is no special situtation such as low birth rate, we don't have to make any limit about children number in one family.
>>I think if there is no special situation, such as low birth rate, there shouldn't be a limit on how many children should be in one family. 

Because if there are limit about children number in one family, it can cause some problems about the human rights.
>> If there is a limit on how many children there should be in one family, it will cause some problems in terms of human rights. 

Ex) some people didn't want to get children but the gorverment told them to get some children, and it can be problem.
>> For example, when couples choose to not have children but the government is pushing them to have some, this would cause a problem.

Another ex) some people are poor because of getting lots of children, and it can be another problem about human rights too.
>>Another example is that some people are poor because of having a lot of children which can also be a problem. 

So I think its better to be no limit about children number in one family, if there are no problem about population.
>> So I think its better to not  have any limit on the number of children a family can have  if there are is problem in the population.

번호 제목 글쓴이 공개 상태 등록일 조회수
107086 If you could be born in another country, which one would you... 여*진 완료 2021-03-31 0
107085 What are the things that you have learned last year? 이*정 완료 2021-03-31 721
107084 I... 문*경 완료 2021-03-31 1
107083 Composition 변*훈 완료 2021-03-31 1522
107082 Homework 함*주 완료 2021-03-31 1
107081 Do you think the world would be a better place without cars? 김*하 완료 2021-03-31 1406
107080 Is it better to talk about and share opinions or keep them to... 문*현 완료 2021-03-31 1446
107079 What is your favorite season and why? 하*조 완료 2021-03-31 1599
107078 Homework 양*진 완료 2021-03-31 0
107077 HI.... 조*현 완료 2021-03-31 0
107076 Do you like meeting new people? Why or why not? What are some... 김*연 완료 2021-03-31 1778
107075 Homework 이*애 완료 2021-03-31 8
107074 . Can you explain this proverb in other words? \"Save your... 권*원 완료 2021-03-31 1315
107073 Do you prefer hot countries or cool countries when you go on... 김*정 완료 2021-03-30 4
107072 you think violence is needed to discipline a child? Why or why... 박*주 완료 2021-03-30 1369
107071 About Me! 김*환 완료 2021-03-30 1309
107070 The country that I would like to born in if I could 김*원 완료 2021-03-30 1035
107069 What are the advantages and disadvantages of Online Selling and... 김*국 완료 2021-03-30 1483
107068 What are the things that you have learned last year? 허*늘 완료 2021-03-30 3
107067 If you could be born in another country, which one would you... 허*늘 완료 2021-03-30 3

HOW TO USE IT?

[마이페이지 > 수업 내용 보기 > 학습 캘린더 > 영작교정 버튼 클릭]

수업 횟수만큼 영작교정 게시판이 생성되며,
지난 날짜에도 게시 할 수 있습니다.

주5회 수업 : 월 20회 이용 가능
주3회 수업 : 월 12회 이용 가능
주2회 수업 : 월 08회 이용 가능
01
교정 내용은 최대 1,000byte까지 올릴 수 있습니다.

첨부 파일은 원활한 첨삭을 위한 참고자료로 사용될 뿐,
파일에 대한 첨삭은 불가능 합니다.

업로드 가능한 첨부 파일은 최대 2mb까지이며,
첨부 할 수 있는 파일 형식은 다음과 같습니다.

문서 - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
이미지 - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
전문 분야를 제외한 회원님이 직접 작성한 글만
첨삭이 가능하며,

올려주신 글의 강사님 첨삭은 24시간 이내에
완료 되는 것을 원칙으로 하고 있습니다.
03
하루 게시 가능한 글은 3회까지 이며,
종료된 수업의 영작교정 게시판은
이용이 어려운 점 양해 부탁 드립니다.
04

와이즈에듀케이션아이(주) 사이트명: 파워잉글리쉬 대표이사 전상현
사업자등록번호: 217-81-44736 통신판매신고번호: 2014-서울도봉-0233호
서울본사: 서울시 노원구 한글비석로 245 두타빌 B동 7층 713호
대표번호 1688-8672 개인정보관리 책임자: 안희영 [powerenglish@pweng.net]