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Should there be a limit on how many children there should be in a family?
-> I think if there is no special situtation such as low birth rate, we don't have to make any limit about children number in one family.
Because if there are limit about children number in one family, it can cause some problems about the human rights.
Ex) some people didn't want to get children but the gorverment told them to get some children, and it can be problem.
Another ex) some people are poor because of getting lots of children, and it can be another problem about human rights too.
So I think its better to be no limit about children number in one family, if there are no problem about population.

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Hi John! You're right. These kinds of policies are only given to the society if there is a problem in terms of the population. The government should think about it a lot because it will be against human rights. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think if there is no special situtation such as low birth rate, we don't have to make any limit about children number in one family.
>>I think if there is no special situation, such as low birth rate, there shouldn't be a limit on how many children should be in one family. 

Because if there are limit about children number in one family, it can cause some problems about the human rights.
>> If there is a limit on how many children there should be in one family, it will cause some problems in terms of human rights. 

Ex) some people didn't want to get children but the gorverment told them to get some children, and it can be problem.
>> For example, when couples choose to not have children but the government is pushing them to have some, this would cause a problem.

Another ex) some people are poor because of getting lots of children, and it can be another problem about human rights too.
>>Another example is that some people are poor because of having a lot of children which can also be a problem. 

So I think its better to be no limit about children number in one family, if there are no problem about population.
>> So I think its better to not  have any limit on the number of children a family can have  if there are is problem in the population.

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