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What are the advantages and disadvantages of Online Selling and buying?

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I think as below. It is no need to visit directly any market, mart, department store. It is more convenient than face to face marketing.
But peoples cannot try to wear the clothes and taste the food. Online prices is generally cheaper than offline, because it can save a number of workers. It is a difficult thing to return the product when you don't satisfy the product that you ordered at online buying.

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Hi Sir Mandeep! Thank you for taking time in answering the question. Here are some of the corrections, but other than that, you did great! :)
~ T. Camille

I think as below. 
>> As stated below, there's no need to visit directly any market, mart, or department stores.

It is no need to visit directly any market, mart, department store. 
>> As stated below, there's no need to visit directly any market, mart, or department stores.

It is more convenient than face to face marketing.
>> CORRECT!

But peoples cannot try to wear the clothes and taste the food. 
>> The only thing is, people cannot try to wear the clothes, and taste the food.

Online prices is generally cheaper than offline, because it can save a number of workers.
>> Online prices are generally cheaper than offline, because it can save a number of workers.

It is a difficult thing to return the product when you don't satisfy the product that you ordered at online buying.
>> It is a difficult thing to return the product when you aren't satisfied with the product that you ordered online.
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