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I can't find any positive aspects for users when we put our personal information on online. I can't still understand why companies ask user's information from ID number to address which is very sensitive information. Many people have experienced someone to use their information for crime even though companies developed and ran security programs. Website operators can easily take these information and they analyze it. Companies can say that this is for customers because they create big data and provide it to customers that are products which people like the most and search. They also provide various contents which is related what people searched before. There are a lot of benefits we can get from the internet but nobody sure if it is safe. I think that if users put the minimum information when they join the website, it would be much better than now. Our society has been becoming the internet based community and it will become more modern. Most countries have implemented various

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I can't find any positive aspects for users when we put our personal information on online. 
>>> I can't find any positive aspects for users when we put our personal information online. 
I can't still understand why companies ask user's information from ID number to address which is a very sensitive information.
>>> CORRECT
 Many people have experienced someone to use their information for crime even though companies developed and ran security programs. 
>>> CORRECT
Website operators can easily take these information and they analyze it. 
>>> Website operators can easily take these information and  analyze it. 
Companies can say that this is for customers because they create big data and provide it to customers that are products which people like the most and search. 
>>> Companies can say that this is for customers because they create big data and provide it to customers in products which people like the most and search. 
They also provide various contents which is related what people searched before. 
>>> They also provide various contents which is related to what people searched before. 
There are a lot of benefits we can get from the internet but nobody sure if it is safe.
>>> There are a lot of benefits we can get from the internet but nobody is sure if it is safe.
 I think that if users put the minimum information when they join the website, it would be much better than now.
>>> CORRECT
 Our society has been becoming the internet based community and it will become more modern. 
>>> CORRECT
Most countries have implemented various...
>>> CORRECT
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