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What are the things that you have learned last year?
-> I learned lots of things in elementary school last year, and the most memorable thing that I learned is science.
I didn't know about why the season of the Earth is changing each particular times.
But I've been learned why the season of the Earth is changing in my elementary school last year.
And I also learned about how to make fire, and how to extinguish fire.
Also I learned about how to keep fire with another things or objects.
And my favorite subject is science, so I think it was most memorable thing I've learned last year.
So the most memorable thing that I learned at my elementary school last year is science.

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Hi John! That sounds amazing! At least you learned a lot last year despite all the hardships our world is facing. It's okay to face some struggles. Always remember, "No pain, No gain!"

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I learned lots of things in elementary school last year, and the most memorable thing that I learned is science.
>>I learned lots of things in elementary school last year and the most memorable thing that I learned is science.

I didn't know about why the season of the Earth is changing each particular times.
>>I didn't know about why the season in Earth changes in particular times but I have learned about it last year. 

But I've been learned why the season of the Earth is changing in my elementary school last year.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

And I also learned about how to make fire, and how to extinguish fire.
>> I also learned about how to make fire and how to extinguish fire.

Also I learned about how to keep fire with another things or objects.
>>Also I learned about how to keep fire away from other things or objects. 

And my favorite subject is science, so I think it was most memorable thing I've learned last year.
>> My favorite subject is science so I think it was most memorable thing I've learned last year.

So the most memorable thing that I learned at my elementary school last year is science.
>> THIS SENTENCE IS ALREADY RELATED TO THE SENTENCE ABOVE :)
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