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Is appearance important to your job? Share your answer in a short paragraph.

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Well, I am a nurse thus in fact, appearance is not matter when it comes to looking after our patients. I believe rather it, kindness, abilities of dealing with between medical professionals and patients is more significant. However, it is true that most koreans tend to be aware of appearance in many ways. So that's why plastic surgeries are sough after in my country.

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Hello Jane!

Beauty is in the eye of the beholder. Hence, beauty in every country is subjective. 

However, what is in someone's heart is something that shines brighter than physical beauty. The ability to care and pay attention to the needs of others is a real beauty.

Thanks for this answer to my question today. See you next month!

-T. Donna =)

Well, I am a nurse thus in fact, appearance is not matter when it comes to looking after our patients. 
>> Well, I am a nurse thus, in fact, appearance is not a matter when it comes to looking after our patients. 

I believe rather it, kindness, abilities of dealing with between medical professionals and patients is more significant. 
>> I believe rather,  kindness and abilities of dealing with between medical professionals and patients are more significant. 

However, it is true that most koreans tend to be aware of appearance in many ways. 
>> Correct!
Or: Koreans (Capital letter K) 

So that's why plastic surgeries are sough after in my country.
>> Correct!
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