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What do you think life was like for human beings when dinosaurs were around?

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I think that life of the human beings were cruelly hard. They have to be aware of predators. Also, they had to find foods to eat. Although they lived with other people, their life were still hard before basis civilization developed.

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Here's your edited composition, Kai! Catch you next week!

Cheers, 
Jean~~



I think that life of the human beings were cruelly hard. 
>> I think that the life of human beings at that time was cruelly hard. 

They have to be aware of predators. 
>> They always had to be aware of predators and live on the edge. 

Also, they had to find foods to eat. 
>> correct

Although they lived with other people, their life were still hard before basis civilization developed.
>> Although they lived with other people, their life was still hard before the development of civilization. 
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