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If people believe and trust in their country, they can feel more happiness
Many people have a prejudice if people have more income, they become happy.
But UK, one of the wealth countries has lower happy people than Finland.
It is the reason why trust is more important factor than income.
Furthermore, lockdown due to COVID-19 makes people¡¯s emotion lower.
But Finland didn¡¯t be affected significantly by corona so they didn¡¯t have to lockdown.
It is another reason why Finland maintains their record that has been named the happiest country.
/What makes me happy is people and freedom.
I feel at ease with my family or my friends than alone.
Therefore, when I prepared for middle test in university, I always studied with my friends.
And I don¡¯t like doing the same things over and over again.
I like adjusting to change and I like an atmosphere of freedom than rigid discipline.
(You are the best teachers I met in power English! I wish you be happy forever. God bless you!)

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Good morning, Cleo! I would like to express my happiness and gratitude for your good performance and nice personality. I wish it is not our last. I know we will still see each other again soon! You will start your first job, so break a leg! Take it easy! God bless you too!-Faith-
If people believe and trust in their country, they can feel more happiness
>> If people believe and trust in their government, they can feel more happiness.
Many people have a prejudice if people have more income, they become happy.
>> Many people have prejudice but if they have more income, they become happy.
But UK, one of the wealth countries has lower happy people than Finland.
>> But UK, one of the wealthy countries, has lower rate of happy people than Finland.
It is the reason why trust is more important factor than income.
>> It is the reason why trust is a more important factor than income.
Furthermore, lockdown due to COVID-19 makes people¡¯s emotion lower.
>> Furthermore, the lockdown due to COVID-19 makes people¡¯s emotional stability lower.
But Finland didn¡¯t be affected significantly by corona so they didn¡¯t have to lockdown.
>> But Finland didn't get affected significantly by coronavirus so they didn¡¯t have to implement a lockdown.
It is another reason why Finland maintains their record that has been named the happiest country.
>> It is another reason why Finland maintains their record that as the the happiest country.
/What makes me happy is people and freedom.
>> What make me happy are my loved ones and freedom.
I feel at ease with my family or my friends than alone.
>> I feel more at ease with my family or my friends than being alone.
Therefore, when I prepared for middle test in university, I always studied with my friends.
>> Therefore, when I prepared for the middle test in university, I always studied with my friends.
And I don¡¯t like doing the same things over and over again.
>> And, I don¡¯t like doing the same things over and over again.
I like adjusting to change and I like an atmosphere of freedom than rigid discipline.
>> I like adjusting to change and I like an atmosphere of freedom more than rigid discipline.
You are the best teachers I met in power English! 
>> You are the best teacher I've met in power English! 
I wish you be happy forever. 
>> I wish you to be happy forever. 
God bless you!
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