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What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a pet?

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I had a dog when I was eight. My sister and I wanted to get a dog so we always asked dad to buy dog. My father refused it first but finally he bought dog to us. At first, we were happy to just see dog. because he was very cute. but that's all.. The time goes on.. we were tired to care to dog.. He was so cute but we couldn't jog with him and couldn't wash him everyday.. you know I was 8. so my parents decided to give him cousin. now I still love dogs but I don't like having dogs.

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Hi Tobby! Wow, having a pet is a handful based on your experience. Hahahaha! It made me think about having a dog again. But all in all, having pets are very fulfilling. They comfort us in their own ways. Everyday seems better with them. :) 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I had a dog when I was eight. 
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My sister and I wanted to get a dog so we always asked dad to buy dog. 
>>My sister and I wanted to get a dog so we always asked our dad to buy us one. 

My father refused it first but finally he bought dog to us. 
>>My father refused at first but finally he bought us a dog.

At first, we were happy to just see dog. because he was very cute. 
>>At first, we were so happy because it was very cute. 

but that's all.. The time goes on.. we were tired to care to dog.. 
>> But as time goes by, we got tired of taking care of it. 

He was so cute but we couldn't jog with him and couldn't wash him everyday.. 
>> He was so cute but we couldn't jog with him and wash him everyday.. 

you know I was 8. so my parents decided to give him cousin. 
>> As you know I was 8 during that time so I didn't really had the time to do all those things so my dad decided to give it to our cousin instead. 

now I still love dogs but I don't like having dogs.
>> Now I still like dogs but not to the point that I will have one again. 
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