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What are the advantages and disadvantages of having a pet?
-> I think there are lots of adventages and disadventages of having a pet in my house.
For adventages, we can feel happy when we are seeing our pet or we can heel our mind.
If we see a cute puppy, we feel happy, and also it can heel our mind as well.
And for disadventages, we have to use lots of money to our own pet.
If the pet need a house, we have to buy it, and if the pet need new food, we have to buy it too.
And there are lots of things to buy for our own pet beside these things.
So I think there are lots of adventages and disadventages of having a pet in my house.

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Hi John! Wow, having a pet is a handful. Hahahaha! It made me think about having a dog again. But all in all, having pets are very fulfilling. They comfort us in their own ways. Everyday seems better with them. :) 

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 I think there are lots of adventages and disadventages of having a pet in my house.
>> I think there are a lot of advantages and disadvantages in having a pet in my house.

For adventages, we can feel happy when we are seeing our pet or we can heel our mind.
>>For advantages, we can feel happy when we see our pet. They also bring peace to our mind. 

If we see a cute puppy, we feel happy, and also it can heel our mind as well.
>>If we see a cute puppy, we feel happy and it heals our mind as well. 

And for disadventages, we have to use lots of money to our own pet.
>>And for the disadvantages, we have to spend lots of money for our pet.

If the pet need a house, we have to buy it, and if the pet need new food, we have to buy it too.
>>If the pet needs a house, we have to buy it. If the pet needs food, we have to buy it too. 

And there are lots of things to buy for our own pet beside these things.
>>And there are lots of things to buy for our pet beside these things.

So I think there are lots of adventages and disadventages of having a pet in my house.
>>So I think there are lots of advantages and disadvantages in having a pet in my house.

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