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The change of the weather where I live.

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The change has been changed a little bit.
It is hotter in the summer and it is colder in the winter .
I think it is because of the global warming.
People tend to go inside the building when it's hotter or colder.
and they turn on the air-conditioner or heater more.
It makes the air and environment worse.
The vice-circulation is repeated.

Unless we try to do something to solve this problem, we exacerbate our ecosystem ourselves.
So, we have to try to save the energy and not to make waste.

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Hi Juliet, Thanks for completing your homework. Keep it up!
Have a good day! 
>>> TEACHER JAMES
The change has been changed a little bit.
>>> CORRECT
It is hotter in the summer and it is colder in the winter .
>>> It is hotter in the summer and it is colder in the winter.
I think it is because of the global warming.
>>> I think it is because of global warming.
People tend to go inside the building when it's hotter or colder.
>>> CORRECT
and they turn on the air-conditioner or heater more.
>>> CORRECT
It makes the air and environment worse.
>>> CORRECT
The vice-circulation is repeated.
>>> CORRECT
Unless we try to do something to solve this problem, we exacerbate our ecosystem ourselves.
>>> CORRECT
So, we have to try to save the energy and not to make waste.
>>> So, we need to try to save energy and not to waste it.
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