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How do you preserve beautuful sceneries in your country?

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In korea, there are many unique heritages which we have preserved for a long time. The Korean government set several rules, especially one of the rules is called a green belt to protect our beautiful sceneries from indiscriminately developments.
Korea has a small land but it has a long history. It has developed its own cultures such as architectures, religions and natures. Also, most koreans are very proud of their heritages and they have been trying to preserve beatiful sceneries. However, some people destroyed our beautiful sceneries just for getting benefits. That is the reson that the government set a rule and punish them.

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Hello there Young Won!

Greed push people to destroy and exploit the environment until there is not left of it. The government needs to be serious in preserving what is left with these heritage or we will suffer more in the future.

Thank you very much for this composition. It is critical and well supported. Keep it up!

-T. Donna =)

In korea, there are many unique heritages which we have preserved for a long time. 
>> In Korea, there are many unique heritage which we have preserved for a long time. 

The Korean government set several rules, especially one of the rules is called a green belt to protect our beautiful sceneries from indiscriminately developments.
>> The Korean government set several rules, especially one which is called a green belt to protect our beautiful sceneries from indiscriminate developments.

Korea has a small land but it has a long history. 
>> Correct!

It has developed its own cultures such as architectures, religions and natures. 
>> It has developed its own culture such as architecture, religions, and nature. 

Also, most koreans are very proud of their heritages and they have been trying to preserve beatiful sceneries. 
>> Also, most Koreans are very proud of their heritage and they have been trying to preserve beautiful sceneries. 

However, some people destroyed our beautiful sceneries just for getting benefits. 
>> Correct!

That is the reson that the government set a rule and punish them.
>> That is the reason why the government set rules and punish for them.
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