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Is it true that money can make the world go round? for some people, this is their source of happines

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Layla: I can't say it's absolute, but it's true that money has a big impact on how the world go around
Without money, all the economic conditions in the world will stop and affect our lives negatively
We need money to buy things and it is absolute means to live our basic lives.
Also, there may be people whose money is the happiness of life because each person has different standards of happiness.
I think that's the because money is greatly influencial to our lives

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Hello Layla, Great job for doing your homework. As you know, Practice makes perfect so keep writing and tell me your thoughts about certain things :)
~Teacher Aki^^
I can't say it's absolute, but it's true that money has a big impact on how the world go around.
>> CORRECT!
OR>> It may not be absolute but it's true that money has a great impact on the world now.
Without money, all the economic conditions in the world will stop and affect our lives negatively
>> CORRECT!
OR>> Without money, economy will stop and would affect our lives negatively.
We need money to buy things and it is absolute means to live our basic lives.
>>CORRECT!
OR>> We need money for different transactions and to support our basic needs.
Also, there may be people whose money is the happiness of life because each person has different standards of happiness.
>> Also, there may be some people where money is their source of happiness in life because each person has different source of happiness
I think that's the because money is greatly influencial to our lives
>> I thought about that because money greatly influences / affects our lives.
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