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What\'s your thought on the by-election in Seoul?

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I think that the by-election in Seoul is important. Because the election in Seoul can effect at the party and other city. Also, Seoul is the most important election among local elections. So it can affect at the president election directly.

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I think that the by-election in Seoul is important. Because the election in Seoul can effect at the party and other city.
>> I think that the by-election in Seoul is important because it can affect not only the different political parties and Seoul city but also other cities. 

 Also, Seoul is the most important election among local elections. 
>>  Also, the Seoul election is the most important one among local elections. 

So it can affect at the president election directly.
>> This is because it can affect the presidential election directly.
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