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If you could change any aspect of your personality, what would it be?

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I want to change perfectionism, one of my personality. Perfectionism is a kind of obsession, so that makes me tired. I have a lot of responsibility associated with me. I always suffer from lack of sleep, and say to me, 'Hurry up'. Sometimes, ironically, I can't do what I have to, because I have too many works to do. That works include what I make and what someone gives to me. Therefore, I want to take some rests and get relaxed. I am trying to say to me, 'It's okay'.

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Hello Erin. Great job for diligently doing your homework.
~Teacher Aki ^^
I want to change perfectionism, one of my personality. 
>> One of my personalities that I want to change is being a "perfectionist"
Perfectionism is a kind of obsession, so that makes me tired. 
>> CORRECT!
OR>> Being a little obsessed with "perfectionism" makes me tired.
I have a lot of responsibility associated with me. I always suffer from lack of sleep, and say to me, 'Hurry up'. 
>> There's a lot of responsibilities assigned to me and I always have sleepless nights that even sometimes I could hear someone  asking me to "hurry up"
Sometimes, ironically, I can't do what I have to, because I have too many works to do. 
>> CORRECT
OR>> I sometimes, can't even do what I have to do due to loads of work.
That works include what I make and what someone gives to me. 
>> Those include my personal job and the assigned ones.
OR>> Those include my personal job and someone asking for a favor.
Therefore, I want to take some rests and get relaxed. I am trying to say to me, 'It's okay'.
>> I just want to get some rest and be relaxed, so I always tell myself that "It's okay".
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