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I think the experiences when they are childeren before they go to school and the experiences when they are teenagers both are important.
When children before they go to school, many experiences make them increase creativity.
But when they adult, they can't remember. But they will remain in their's heart.
On the contrary, the experiences they are teenagers, it can help them to choose their job.
Therefore both are important.

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HAPPY TUESDAY TO YOU EDEN~! ^^
Believe in your dreams and always focus on those things that matter most. Strike a balance between what is serious and what is irrelevant. You¡¯re lifted. 
A fresh start, a clean slate, and a lot of potentials for great things to come. That is what Tuesdays really are.
Have a sweet day~!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
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I think the experiences when they are childeren before they go to school and the experiences when they are teenagers both are important.
>>> I think their experiences when they were children before they go to school and the experiences when they are teenagers are both important.
When children before they go to school, many experiences make them increase creativity.
>>> When children go to school,  they make many experiences which increase their creativity.
But when they adult, they can't remember. 
>>> But when they become adults, they won't remember anything. 
But they will remain in their hearts.
>>> CORRECT
On the contrary, the experiences they are teenagers, it can help them to choose their job.
>>> On the contrary, the experiences they had during their  teenage life, it can help them choose their job.
Therefore, both are important.
>>> CORRECT

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