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Which one would you rather use as your main source of information, the internet or books?

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I think I will use the Internet. Because the Internet has much more information than books. And the Internet is much faster to find information than books. however, information with the Internet can be unclear or irrelevant. So when you look for information on the Internet, you should definitely read it and examine it. And these days, the contents of books can be found on the Internet. So the Internet is much more useful.

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Hi Sarah! Yes. the internet is a very convenient tool to use to get information. It makes our lives more convenient. Although, not all information on the internet is reliable that's why we should be careful in picking our sources. ^^

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think I will use the Internet. 
>>I think I will use the Internet because the Internet has much more information than books. 

Because the Internet has much more information than books. 
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE

And the Internet is much faster to find information than books. 
>>Using the internet is so much faster in finding information than books. 

however, information with the Internet can be unclear or irrelevant.
>>However, information from the Internet can sometimes be unclear or irrelevant.

 So when you look for information on the Internet, you should definitely read it and examine it. 
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And these days, the contents of books can be found on the Internet. 
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So the Internet is much more useful.
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