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Which one would you rather use as your main source of information, the internet or books? Explain your answer.
-> Honestly, I want to use Internet more than books if I have to find some imformations about something.
If we use Internet, we can find some imformations with Internet more faster than books.
And there are more imformations about something that I want to know than books.
These are the adventages about using Internet when I want to search some imformations about something.
But there are also disadventages about searching imformations with Internet.
If we search aome imformations long times, our eyes can be hurted by digital devices.
Also we can be stressed by long times that we are using digital devices for some imformations.
But I'll use Internet if Ihave to search some imformations about somethings.

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Hi John! Yes. the internet is a very convenient tool to use to get information. It makes our lives more convenient. Although, not all information on the internet is reliable that's why we should be careful in picking our sources. ^^

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!


 Honestly, I want to use Internet more than books if I have to find some imformations about something.
>> Honestly, I want to use Internet more than books if I have to find some information about something.

If we use Internet, we can find some imformations with Internet more faster than books.
>>If we use Internet, we can find some information more faster than books. 

And there are more imformations about something that I want to know than books.
>> And  we can fid more information using it. 

These are the adventages about using Internet when I want to search some imformations about something.
>> These are some of the advantages we get from using the internet in finding information

But there are also disadventages about searching imformations with Internet.
>>But there are also disadvantages.

If we search aome imformations long times, our eyes can be hurted by digital devices.
>>If we use the internet for a long time, our eyes may hurt from using digital devices. 

Also we can be stressed by long times that we are using digital devices for some imformations.
>> We can also get stressed by it. 

But I'll use Internet if Ihave to search some imformations about somethings.
>> Regardless, I would still use the internet to find information about some things. 
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