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I like animals very much!! But unfortunately, I am allergic to animal fur. My mother used to raise a dog named Sol bee but she died because she was too old. My mother raised lots of dogs before she married with my father. I especially like cats among animals because they are so attractive. I wish I could raise a cat one day and overcomes or cure the allergy.

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Hi there Yeon Woo!

Nice to see you again here on the composition site.

Animals are very loving and quiet unlike human beings. They give joy like no other and relieve our stress when we are feeling toxic. Well, I am glad that you love pets as I do!

Thanks for writing this. See you in class again soon!

-T. Donna =)

I like animals very much!! 
>> Correct!
Or: I like animals very much!

But unfortunately, I am allergic to animal fur. 
>> Unfortunately, I am allergic to animal fur. 
>> But, I am allergic to animal fur. 

My mother used to raise a dog named Sol bee but she died because she was too old. 
>> Correct!

My mother raised lots of dogs before she married with my father. 
>> Correct!
Or: My mother raised lots of dogs before she married my father. 

I especially like cats among animals because they are so attractive. 
>> Correct!

I wish I could raise a cat one day and overcomes or cure the allergy.
>> I wish I could raise a cat one day and overcome or cure the allergy.
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