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I think that watching videos is the most popular hobby in the world.
Nowadays, many people watch Youtube or Netflix in their free time regardless of age.
The first reason is appearance of many devices that can watch a lot of videos.
Additionally, recently, COVID19 came out so it is making people keep stay in their house.
These things made many people watch videos.

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Hi Jun, thank you for your time. Have a great day!
Jasmin. 



I think that watching videos is the most popular hobby in the world.
>> I think watching videos on the internet is one of the most popular hobbies in the world.  
Nowadays, many people watch Youtube or Netflix in their free time regardless of age.
>>Nowadays, A lot of people in wide range of ages watch on YouTube or Netflix in their free time. 
The first reason is appearance of many devices that can watch a lot of videos.
>>The main reason is because of the High technologies that we can use to watch videos. 
Additionally, recently, COVID19 came out so it is making people keep stay in their house.
>>Aside from that, a lot of people stay at home to be safe from the COVID19 outbreak. 
These things made many people watch videos.
>> And to kill the time at home, a lot of people watch different kinds of videos. 
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