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Which one would you rather use as your main source of information, the internet or books?

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I would rather use the internet as my main source of information.
First, I think using internet takes less time than books. It takes a lot of time to find information on books.
Second, there are many information on the internet so we can learn more.
Lastly, I think information on the internet is accurate them books. Many people will watch it so they won¡¯t make mistakes.
These are the reason why I would rather use the internet as my main source of information.

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Hi Heidi! Yes. the internet is a very convenient tool to use to get information. It makes our lives more convenient. Although, not all information on the internet is reliable that's why we should be careful in picking our sources. ^^

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I would rather use the internet as my main source of information.
>> CORRECT

First, I think using internet takes less time than books. 
>>CORRECT

It takes a lot of time to find information on books.
>> CORRECT

Second, there are many information on the internet so we can learn more.
>> CORRECT

Lastly, I think information on the internet is accurate them books. 
>> Lastly, I think information on the internet is more accurate than books. 

Many people will watch it so they won¡¯t make mistakes.
>> Many people will see it so the authors should make sure not to make mistakes. 

These are the reason why I would rather use the internet as my main source of information.
>> CORRECT
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