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Yes! I want to adot a pet!

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Maybe you know. I love pets very much. But my mom doesn't have any allergies, but she doesn't want to have a pet.
Anyway the topic of this homework is "do you want to adopt a pet", but I think this is the topic of "do you want to have a pet". If so, of course my answer is "yes". First of all, the reason I like pets is because they are cute. Then, secondly, became feel better, and finally, my stress is relieved. However, I can't really guarantee that once someone start keeping a pet, there will be only good things. They may be poop or sometimes pets are touching valuables, and there may be times when you are watching television and suddenly touch the remote control and the television turns off(Television is my favorite things in my life). So, those who are willing to have pets should make their decisions very carefully about having pets, because they will have one more family.
P.S. That picture is not mine~^^;;

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Maria!

Having a pet is a great responsibility because it means that you are talking care of another life even if not human. You need to feed, bathe, care, love, and everything you do to a human being, you need to apply that to your pet. Also, you will be very sad when they die.

So consider well adopting a pet someday because it can be expensive and it will take much of your time but this pet can reward you with lots of love and affection.

See you, thanks for this!

-T. Donna =)

Maybe you know. I love pets very much. 
>> Maybe you know that I love pets very much.

But my mom doesn't have any allergies, but she doesn't want to have a pet.
>> My mom doesn't have any allergies but she doesn't want to have a pet.

Anyway the topic of this homework is "do you want to adopt a pet", but I think this is the topic of "do you want to have a pet". 
>> Anyway the topic of this homework is "do you want to adopt a pet", but I think this is the real topic, "do you want to have a pet". 

If so, of course my answer is "yes". First of all, the reason I like pets is because they are cute. 
>> Correct!

Then, secondly, became feel better, and finally, my stress is relieved. 
>> Then, secondly, I feel better. And finally, my stress is relieved. 

However, I can't really guarantee that once someone start keeping a pet, there will be only good things. 
>> However, I can't really guarantee that once someone starts keeping a pet, there will only be good things. 

They may be poop or sometimes pets are touching valuables, and there may be times when you are watching television and suddenly touch the remote control and the television turns off(Television is my favorite things in my life). 
>> They may be poop or sometimes pets are touching valuables, and there may be times when you are watching television and suddenly they touch the remote control and the television turns off (Television is my favorite things in my life). 

So, those who are willing to have pets should make their decisions very carefully about having pets, because they will have one more family.
>> Correct!

P.S. That picture is not mine~^^;;
>> Correct!
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