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If you are going to make a movie, what story would you like to have?
-> If I am going to make a movie, I want to make it about the future of the Earth (SF).
The story of the movie is like this :
Some astronauts went to the space to discover the new stars or planets.
And according to the special relativity, those astronauts' times are slower than the Earth's.
So when they returned to the Earth, there was polluted by radioactivity.
When they were in the space, there was a big earthquake.
And that caused lots of the damages.
And the biggest damage was broken down of radioactivity power plants.
And the astronauts solve the proplem of polluted earth.

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Hi John! That's a very clever movie you got there. It's fascinating how our imagination runs wild when we get inspired. ^^

 Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!


If I am going to make a movie, I want to make it about the future of the Earth (SF).\
>>If I am going to make a movie, I want to be about the future of the Earth (SF).\

The story of the movie is like this :
>> The story would go like this. 

Some astronauts went to the space to discover the new stars or planets.
>>Some astronauts went to the outer space to discover the new stars or planets.

And according to the special relativity, those astronauts' times are slower than the Earth's.
>>CORRECT

So when they returned to the Earth, there was polluted by radioactivity.
>>So when they return to Earth, there will be pollution caused by radio activity. 

When they were in the space, there was a big earthquake
>>When they were in the space, there was a big earthquake and it caused a lot of damage. 

And that caused lots of the damages.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE.

And the biggest damage was broken down of radioactivity power plants.
>>T
he biggest damage was the broken down of radioactivity power plants.

And the astronauts solve the proplem of polluted earth.
>> The astronauts need solve this problem in Earth. 
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