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작성자: 박*범
2021-04-08 672

회원님의 영작문

Well, Nowadays I quite often use texting to communicated with someone on my phone more than make a phone call compared to in the past. That’s because all of people have had a smartphone. And they always bring on it whenever they wanted and wherever they went without put it down. As you know, it is very easy and comfy to use texting on your mobile phone as well. And, there are so many kinds of social network service such as Facebook, instagram, KakaoTalk, WhatsApp and so on. One of the most famous applications is KakaoTalk in our country. I always use it to contact with my closed friends. Moreover, we created to chat room for keep in touch each other. So, we are keeping in touch through KakaoTalk on my smartphone. I think it’s really comfy to use when I talk to my friends instantly. That’s the reason why many people usually communicated with someone through text message on their phone. It means that they are becoming the norm these day. That being say, we can’t live in without phone.

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Hi Tiger,
There are many ways to communicate with other people and one of the famous and common that we do is texting or chatting using various applications. Texting was once a space for connecting with close family and friends. Now, it’s more of open space, but recipients still have control over who is able to reach out to them. The advantages of using text messages include the ability to have a discreet conversation in public without the possibility of being overheard. Disadvantages of using this form of electronic communication include a high potential for distraction in situations that require focus. Stay in touch / Stay connected. 

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Well, Nowadays I quite often use texting to communicated with someone on my phone more than make a phone call compared to in the past.
>>Well, Nowadays I often use texting to communicate with someone on my phone more than making a phone call compared to the past.
That’s because all of people have had a smartphone. 
>>That’s because all people have a smartphone. 
And they always bring on it whenever they wanted and wherever they went without put it down.
>>And they always bring it wherever they wanted to go and wherever they went they couldn't leave without it. 
 As you know, it is very easy and comfy to use texting on your mobile phone as well. 
>>  As you know, it is very easy and comfortable to use texting on your mobile phone as well. 
And, there are so many kinds of social network service such as Facebook, instagram, KakaoTalk, WhatsApp and so on. 
>> And, there are so many kinds of social network services such as Facebook, Instagram, KakaoTalk, WhatsApp, and so on. 
One of the most famous applications is KakaoTalk in our country. 
>>One of the most famous applications is KakaoTalk in our country. 
I always use it to contact with my closed friends. 
>>I always use it to contact my close friends. 
Moreover, we created to chat room for keep in touch each other. 
>>Moreover, we created a chat room to keep in touch with each other. 
So, we are keeping in touch through KakaoTalk on my smartphone. 
>>So, we are keeping in touch through KakaoTalk on my smartphone. 
I think it’s really comfy to use when I talk to my friends instantly. 
>>I think it’s really comfortable to use Kakaotalk when I talk to my friends instantly. 
That’s the reason why many people usually commun
>> That’s the reason why many people usually communicate comfortably using their smartphones. 
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Well, Nowadays I quite often use texting to communicated with someone on my phone more than make a phone call compared to in the past. That’s because all of people have had a smartphone. And they always bring on it whenever they wanted and wherever they went without put it down. As you know, it is very easy and comfy to use texting on your mobile phone as well. And, there are so many kinds of social network service such as Facebook, instagram, KakaoTalk, WhatsApp and so on. One of the most famous applications is KakaoTalk in our country. I always use it to contact with my closed friends. Moreover, we created to chat room for keep in touch each other. So, we are keeping in touch through KakaoTalk on my smartphone. I think it’s really comfy to use when I talk to my friends instantly. That’s the reason why many people usually commun
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