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Yesterday, I chose to cancel the online class at first. I worried my choose because I was very awkward because of canceled online class. But I felt my choose is right to today class. Because I think I said the most in today's class among the classes i took until now. And also i think when i learn something i need to have rest time. Considering the classes i took, i think i was impatient. So i decide to have rest time!
Now let us proceed, I say my title 'Good'. I really like my words to change another words on today class. For example, if i usually go to shopping then i was 'shopaholic'. Actually, i want to change my words to another words like slang. So I get to feedback my teacher. I said i love this class type. But my teacher is misunderstanding. Actually, saying among today class i know that isn't i convey my idea.(maybe if my teacher will read this essay, she understands thing i want to convey :)). i'm hurry the end about essay but good night teacher~

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Hi Harry, 
I understand what you want to say. You're developing confidence now when you speak English in class. You also try your best to express your ideas about every topic we discuss. That's great. Keep up the good attitude towards learning and improving your English skills. Don't be hesitant to ask questions and say what's in your mind. You're such a good student. Keep studying. 
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Yesterday, I chose to cancel the online class at first. 
>>Yesterday, I chose to cancel the online class at first. 
I worried my choose because I was very awkward because of canceled online class. 
>>I worried about my choice because I felt very awkward and I canceled the online class. 
But I felt my choose is right to today class. Because I think I said the most in today's class among the classes i took until now.
>>But I felt my choice is right for today's class because I think I said the most in today's class among all the classes I took until now.
And also i think when i learn something i need to have rest time. 
>>And also I think when I learn something I need to take some rest and relax. 
Considering the classes i took, i think i was impatient. So i decide to have rest time!
>>Considering the classes I took I think I was impatient, so I decided to have rest time! 
Now let us proceed, I say my title 'Good'. 
>>Now let us proceed, I say my title is 'Good'. 
I really like my words to change another words on today class. 
>>I really like my words to change to other words in today's class. 
For example, if i usually go to shopping then i was 'shopaholic'. 
>>For example, if I usually go shopping then  I am a 'shopaholic'. 
Actually, i want to change my words to another words like slang. 
>>Actually, I want to change my words to other words like slang. 
So I get to feedback my teacher. I said i love this class type.
>>So I get feedback from my teacher and I said I love this class type.
 But my teacher is misunderstanding. 
>>But my teacher misunderstood it.
Actually, saying among today class i know that isn't i convey my idea.(maybe if my teacher will read this essay, she understands thing i want to convey :)).
>>Actually, in today's class, I know that I didn't convey my ideas well. (maybe if my teacher will read this essay, she understands the thing that I want to convey :)).
 i'm hurry the end about essay but good night teacher~
>> I'm in a hurry to end this essay but good night teacher~
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Yesterday, I chose to cancel the online class at first. I worried my choose because I was very awkward because of canceled online class. But I felt my choose is right to today class. Because I think I said the most in today's class among the classes i took until now. And also i think when i learn something i need to have rest time. Considering the classes i took, i think i was impatient. So i decide to have rest time!
Now let us proceed, I say my title 'Good'. I really like my words to change another words on today class. For example, if i usually go to shopping then i was 'shopaholic'. Actually, i want to change my words to another words like slang. So I get to feedback my teacher. I said i love this class type. But my teacher is misunderstanding. Actually, saying among today class i know that isn't i convey my idea.(maybe if my teacher will read this essay, she understands thing i want to convey :)). i'm hurry the end about essay but good night teacher~
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