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Do you think it\'s important to get physical education in school? Why or why not?

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My dad always told me stamina is very important when you study. I didn't understand what he said but now I realized importance of stamina. Nowadays many people work while sitting chair for long time. the more time passes, the more the people who don't workout increase. so I think the student should do workout at least in school.

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Hi Tobby! That's true! Physical education is as important as other subjects in school. It should not be neglected. It can help us a lot in terms of keeping fit and being athletic. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

My dad always told me stamina is very important when you study. 
>>My dad always told me that stamina is very important when you study. 

I didn't understand what he said but now I realized importance of stamina. 
>>I didn't know back then but now I realized importance of stamina. 

Nowadays many people work while sitting chair for long time. 
>>Nowadays, many people work while sitting on a chair for long time. 

the more time passes, the more the people who don't workout increase. 
>> As time passes, the number of people who don't work out increases. 

so I think the student should do workout at least in school.
>> So I think that students should work out at least in school. 
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