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Do you think it's important to get physical education in school? Why or why not?
-> I think it's important to get physical education in the school because of students' health.
If we do exercise, our health will be healthier than before.
And if we don't do any kinds of exercises, it will be very bad to our bodies.
And also it can cause some problem such as obesity.
But if the schools get physical education, students don't have to worry about these problem.
And it will be more good for student's mood.
In fact, if we do exercise, our bodies secrete endorphins so our mood can be very good.
That's why I think it's important to get physical education in the school because of students' health.

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Hi John! That's true! Physical education is as important as other subjects in school. It should not be neglected. It can help us a lot in terms of keeping fit and being athletic. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!

I think it's important to get physical education in the school because of students' health.
>> CORRECT

If we do exercise, our health will be healthier than before.
>> If we do exercise, our health will be better. 

And if we don't do any kinds of exercises, it will be very bad to our bodies.
>> If we don't, it will be bad for our bodies. 

And also it can cause some problem such as obesity.
>> It can cause some problem such as obesity.

But if the schools get physical education, students don't have to worry about these problem.
>> But if schools offer physical education, students don't have to worry about these problem.

And it will be more good for student's mood.
>> It will also be good for student's mood. 

In fact, if we do exercise, our bodies secrete endorphins so our mood can be very good.
>>In fact, if we do exercise, our bodies secretes endorphins so our mood can be very good.

That's why I think it's important to get physical education in the school because of students' health. 
>>That's why I think it's important to get physical education in schools.
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