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I want to learn how to handle advanced equipment in the future. Because as time goes by, equipment will become more advanced and technology will become more difficult. it seems necessary to learn and deal with such skills in the future. So I am always trying to learn and learn about it related newspapers and information.

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Hi Steve! That's true! Change is inevitable so we have to adapt to it. One of the things that quickly evolves it technology so we have to be familiarized with it. :)

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I want to learn how to handle advanced equipment in the future
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Because as time goes by, equipment will become more advanced and technology will become more difficult. 
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it seems necessary to learn and deal with such skills in the future. 
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So I am always trying to learn and learn about it related newspapers and information.
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