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My worst and best trips ever.

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My best trip was the one to Ulsan when I was 20.
I saw the beach which has many cafes next to it.
At night, there was also many fireworks on that time.
It seemed that it made me a main character in the movie.

There has not been worst trip.
All the trips were meaningful for me.
And all the views were beatiful.
The nature always gave me new energy to live on.

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Thank you Juliet!

I do love nature, too. :) 

~Teacher James

My best trip was the one to Ulsan when I was 20.
>>> CORRECT
I saw the beach which has many cafes next to it.
>>> CORRECT
At night, there was also many fireworks on that time.
>>> At night, there were also many fireworks at that time.
It seemed that it made me a main character in the movie.
>>> CORRECT
There has not been worst trip.
>>> There has not been the worst trip.
All the trips were meaningful for me.
>>> CORRECT
And all the views were beatiful.
>>> And all the views were beautiful.
The nature always gave me new energy to live on.
>>> Nature always gave me new energy to live on. 
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