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It is positive development.
Many people live alone is change of thinking.
It is good to have changed their thinking.
If they live alone the stress are reduce.
And they don't have to be interrupted.
For example many adult say they have to get married.
But if they live alone, they don't have to be forced to talk about this. And they don't have to stress.

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TRIUMPHANT DAY EDEN~! ^^
The best way to not feel hopeless is to get up and do something. Don¡¯t wait for good things to happen to you. If you go out and make some good things happen, you will fill the world with hope, you will fill yourself with hope. 
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It is positive development.
>>>  It is a positive development.
Many people live alone is change of thinking..
>>> Many people live alone depending on their choice.
It is good to have changed their thinking.
>>> It is good to have a changed mind. 
If they live alone the stress are reduce.
>>> If they live alone their stress reduce would be lessen.
And they don't have to be interrupted.
>>> CORRECT
For example many adult say they have to get married.
>>> CORRECT
But if they live alone, they don't have to be forced to talk about this. 
>>> CORRECT
And they don't have to be stressed.
>>> CORRECT
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