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Young generations seem to think that family and themselves are more important than friends. People tend to be more individualistic than before because our society has became too competitive. However, friends are valuable to all generations. I think people can't live without socializing with friends and various people. There are little differences about the meaning of friends between generations. I sometimes feel like sharing my concerns with my friends instead of my family because I don't want my family to be worried about my problems. I usually feel relieved when I speak out my concerns to someone. It is the way to relieve my stress so friends mean a lot to me.

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Young generations seem to think that family and themselves are more important than friends. 
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People tend to be more individualistic than before because our society has became too competitive. 
>>> CORRECT
However, friends are valuable to all generations.
>>> CORRECT
I think people can't live without socializing with friends and various people. 
>>> CORRECT
There are little differences about the meaning of friends between generations.
>>> CORRECT
 I sometimes feel like sharing my concerns with my friends instead of my family because I don't want my family to be worried about my problems.
>>> CORRECT
 I usually feel relieved when I speak out my concerns to someone.
>>> CORRECT
 It is the way to relieve my stress so friends mean a lot to me.
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