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If can be born again, what kind of life would you like to have next? Why?
-> I don't want to born again, and if I have to, I wnat to born with my body, and my family.
If someone wants to born again, that means he or she doesn't like his or her life.
And I'm not that kinds of people, so I just want to live in now my life.
And I think my family is very very great and nice.
Because when I heard about my friends' family, they didn't treat to my friends not that good.
But in my case, my family treat to me very nicely (but my brother didn't treat to me very well).
And I think I'm good at exercise.
And I think my body is perfect to me.
So I don't want to bern again.
And if I have to, I want to born with my body and my family.

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Hi John! Yes, that true. A lot of people are not really contented with the life that they have currently that's why they want to be born again and live a different life. This is called, "Reincarnation". Some people believe in it and some don't. It's  nice to see that you are contented with the life that you have now. Cherish it. :)

 Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. Soon!

I don't want to born again, and if I have to, I wnat to born with my body, and my family.
>>I don't want to be born again but if I have to, I want to born with the same body and have the same family. 

If someone wants to born again, that means he or she doesn't like his or her life.
>>CORRECT

And I'm not that kinds of people, so I just want to live in now my life.
>>And I'm not that kind of person, so I just want to live the life that I have now. 

And I think my family is very very great and nice.
>>I think my family is great and all of them are nice. 

Because when I heard about my friends' family, they didn't treat to my friends not that good.
>>I heard from my friends that their family didn't treat them good. 

But in my case, my family treat to me very nicely (but my brother didn't treat to me very well).
>> But in my case, my family treats me very nicely. Well, except my brother.

And I think I'm good at exercise.
>> I think that I am good at exercising so my body is perfectly fine. 

And I think my body is perfect to me.
>> CONNECT WITH THE SENTENCE ABOVE. 

So I don't want to bern again.
>> That's why I don't to be born again. 

And if I have to, I want to born with my body and my family.
>> And if I have to, I want to born with the same body and same family.

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