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If can be born again, what kind of life would you like to have next? Why?

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I want to be born my parent's kid again. I love my family. T0hey are always supporting for me no matter what I do. sometimes we fight each other for tiny reason. but whenever I had bad time, they gave power to me. of course, I want to be born in rich family, I don't care about the money if I can be born my parent's kid.

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Hi Tobby! Yes, that true. A lot of people are not really contented with the life that they have currently that's why they want to be born again and live a different life. This is called, "Reincarnation". Some people believe in it and some don't. It's  nice to see that you are contented with the life that you have now. Cherish it. :)

 Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. Soon!

I want to be born my parent's kid again. 
>> I want to be born again and be the child of parents again. 

I love my family. 
>> CORRECT

T0hey are always supporting for me no matter what I do.
>> They always support me no matter what. 

sometimes we fight each other for tiny reason. 
>> Sometimes we fight each other for the smallest reason. 

but whenever I had bad time, they gave power to me. of course, I want to be born in rich family, I don't care about the money if I can be born my parent's kid.
>> But whenever I have a hard time, they encourage me. Of course, some  people want to be born with a rich family but I  don't care about money. I still want to have my family. 
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