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In the value of photography, film photography is more valuable than digital photography.
Absolutely digital cameras are more convenient than film cameras.
However there's no film for photography these days, and most people take pictures with digital cameras.
The best picture of the recent one is the picture which I took at Mt.Baekdu.

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Hi Eun Ha!
Take note of the corrections below. 
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Good job!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
In the value of photography, film photography is more valuable than digital photography.
>> In terms of value, film photography is more valuable than digital photography.
Absolutely digital cameras are more convenient than film cameras.
>> Digital cameras are absolutely more convenient than film cameras.
However there's no film for photography these days, and most people take pictures with digital cameras.
>> Correct
The best picture of the recent one is the picture which I took at Mt.Baekdu.
>> The best picture which I took recently was the one of Mt. Baekdu. 
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