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If I can be born again

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If I can be born again, I want to live a normal life. I just want to study same as other students. I want to make good memories with my friends. I¡¯m living a different life what I write. I don¡¯t really regret my decision but if I can be born again I would like to live a normal life.

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Hi Heidi! That sounds interesting. A lot of people are not really contented with the life that they have currently that's why they want to be born again and live a different life. This is called, "Reincarnation". Some people believe in it and some don't. It's  nice to see that you are contented with the life that you have now. Cherish it. :)

 Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. Soon!

If I can be born again, I want to live a normal life. 
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I just want to study same as other students. 
>> I just want to study the same as other students. 

I want to make good memories with my friends. 
>> CORRECT

I¡¯m living a different life what I write. 
>>I¡¯m living a different life than the one I am writing right now. 

I don¡¯t really regret my decision but if I can be born again I would like to live a normal life.
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