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Do you think it\'s important to get physical education in school? Why or why not?

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Do you think it's important to get physical education in school? Why or why not?

It is important to get physical eduction in school.
In our country, most of studedents sit for a long period for studying.
Thay why it needs to do excerise of physical education once a week
When I was in school, i don't like physical eduction because it was boring and tried me.
If i think about it again, it makes my body healthy.
Physical eduction shoul be a requried part of class

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Hi Monica! That's true! Physical education is as important as other subjects in school. It should not be neglected. It can help us a lot in terms of keeping fit and being athletic. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. See you soon!


It is important to get physical eduction in school.
>>It is important to get physical education in school.

In our country, most of studedents sit for a long period for studying.
>>In our country, most of students sit for long period of hours when studying.

Thay why it needs to do excerise of physical education once a week
>>They why they need to do exercise or do physical education once a week.

When I was in school, i don't like physical eduction because it was boring and tried me.
>>When I was in school, I didn't like physical education because it was boring and makes me tired. 

If i think about it again, it makes my body healthy.
>> If i think about it now, it should've made my body healthy.

Physical eduction shoul be a requried part of class
>> Physical education should be required in a class

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