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Is homeschooling an effective method of education? Why or why not?

작성자: 류*주
2021-04-14 686

회원님의 영작문

In my opinion, homeschooling isn't an effective method of education.
The purpose of going to school is learning about new things.
But there is another purpose of going to school, its increasing sociality.
If we go to the school, we can see lots of people, and there are many kinds of people.
And if we meet lots of people who are having different kinds of personalities, we can increase our sociality.
But if we don't go to the school, our sociality will be not increase than the students who are going to school.
And also we can learn about somethings more professionally than the house.
In the school, we can ask some questions about studies.
But in the house, we can't question about studies if our parents don't know about studies.
So I think there is lots of adventages going to school.
That's why I think homeschooling isn't an effective method of education.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi John! Yes, there are a lot of benefits when you go to school to study. You would learn how to socialize and be aware of what is like. You would be exposed to a lot of things and learn from it. Some children need to undergo home schooling because of special reasons. Some are sick, disabilities etc. Although they wouldn't learn as much as in school. Either way, if the educators are good enough, children can still learn from both. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. Soon!
In my opinion, homeschooling isn't an effective method of education.
>>CORRECT

The purpose of going to school is learning about new things.
>>CORRECT

But there is another purpose of going to school, its increasing sociality.
>> Another purpose of going to school is to increase socialization. 

If we go to the school, we can see lots of people, and there are many kinds of people.
>>If we go to school, we can see lots of people with different personalities.

And if we meet lots of people who are having different kinds of personalities, we can increase our sociality.
>> Through this, we can be able to socialize. 

But if we don't go to the school, our sociality will be not increase than the students who are going to school.
>>But if we don't go to the school, our social life will not increase as much as students who goes to school. 

And also we can learn about somethings more professionally than the house.
>>We can also learn things professionally than just staying in the house. 

In the school, we can ask some questions about studies.
>> In school, we interact with people and ask questions. 

But in the house, we can't question about studies if our parents don't know about studies.
>> But if we just stay in the house, some questions can't be answered by our parents because they don't know the answer. 

So I think there is lots of adventages going to school.
>> So I think there are a lot of advantages  when it comes to going to school. 

That's why I think homeschooling isn't an effective method of education.
>>CORRECT
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