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Well, in my experience, when I paid a visit to Guam a couple of years ago I felt over the moon and a sense of satisfaction. First of all, the pacific ocean view was fantastic so I was able to take a lot of beautiful photos. Besides, the weather was so warm and bright thus trees and flowers were gorgeous. There were so many fancy spots where can relax.

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Good evening Jane!

I think that I could imagine Guam by the way you have described it here on your composition. I hope to visit that place too someday with all its beauty and prowess.

Thanks once again for obliging to answer my question. You were almost perfect with your grammar, except for 'one' lacking word. Great job!

See you in class next week!

-T. Donna =)

Well, in my experience, when I paid a visit to Guam a couple of years ago I felt over the moon and a sense of satisfaction. 
>> Correct!

First of all, the pacific ocean view was fantastic so I was able to take a lot of beautiful photos. 
>> Correct!
Or: Pacific Ocean (Capital letters)

Besides, the weather was so warm and bright thus trees and flowers were gorgeous. 
>> Correct!

There were so many fancy spots where can relax.
>> There were so many fancy spots where one can relax.
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