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Encourage a children to leave as soon as he or she becomes an adult is to be able to quickly become independent.
But they think that children should stay at their parent's home for as long as possible because parents are worried about their's children becoming adults.
It is good to independent quickly, but it ia bad to be independent too quickly.
And it is better to stay with their's parents for a while.
Because if they stay for a long time, they will prevent the children's independence.

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Yes, I know some days are more difficult than others. But if you program your mind in a positive way, you won't have to drag through certain days just hoping to get to end the weekday so you can finally enjoy life.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
Encourage a children to leave as soon as he or she becomes an adult is to be able to quickly become independent.
>>> Encouraging children to leave home as soon as he or she becomes an adult is to be able to help them to quickly become independent.
But they think that children should stay at their parent's home for as long as possible because parents are worried about their's children becoming adults.
>>> But they think that children should stay at their parent's home as long as possible because parents are worried about their children while becoming adults.
It is good to independent quickly, but it ia bad to be independent too quickly.
>>> It is good to be independent as soon as possible, but it is bad to be independent too quickly.
And it is better to stay with their's parents for a while.
>>> And it is better to stay with their parents for a while.
Because if they stay for a long time, they will prevent the children's independence.
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