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My best friends give me some hair band, and lip balm in my birthday!

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On June 10, 2020, on the way to school with my best friends, they asked me if there was anything uncomfortable with me these days, but I didn't know what their intentions were, so I said: "I recently put my hair bands in my pouch, but the pouch disappeared, so that I was loosening my hair band, also my lips became dry, so my lips messed up". Surprisingly, on my birthday on June 19th, my best friends gave me a lip balm and a cute hair strap in a pretty box. I had forgotten everything after 9 days, but it was very touching that they still remembered those words. Like these guys, I thought that I should always look closely at my best friend.

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Hi Maria!

You are right, we have to look after our friends even if they only need some tiny things because through that, we can know if they can be reliable in big things. Of course this should be mutual. You need to be able to do these things for them too.

Thanks for this composition even if I was late in submitting your homework. Well done!

-T. Donna =)

On June 10, 2020, on the way to school with my best friends, they asked me if there was anything uncomfortable with me these days, but I didn't know what their intentions were, so I said: "I recently put my hair bands in my pouch, but the pouch disappeared, so that I was loosening my hair band, also my lips became dry, so my lips messed up". 
>> On June 10, 2020, on the way to school with my best friends, they asked me if there was anything uncomfortable with me these days, but I didn't know what their intentions were, so I said: "I recently put my headband in my pouch, but the pouch disappeared, so that I lost my headband, also my lips became dry, so my lips are messed up". 

Surprisingly, on my birthday on June 19th, my best friends gave me a lip balm and a cute hair strap in a pretty box. 
>> Correct!

I had forgotten everything after 9 days, but it was very touching that they still remembered those words. 
>> Correct!

Like these guys, I thought that I should always look closely at my best friend.
>> Like these guys, I thought that I should always look closely at my best friends.
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