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If you can have a big birthday party, how do you want it to be and who are you going to invite?

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I'll not have a big birthday party even if I can have a big birthday party.
Actually, I don't like having a big party even if it is really fun.
So every birthday, I just have a birthday party in the house with my few friends.
The reasons of unliking big party are two reasons.
First, I don't like the place that lots of people are there.
Second, if I'm going to have a big birthday party, I have to know lots of people for inviting to my big birthday party, but I don't know very very lots of people.
Thats why I want to have a big birthday party even if I can have a big birthday party.

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Hi John! Yes, there are a lot advantages and disadvantages in having big birthday parties. It just differs based on what the person like. Some like it  big and some like it just to be intimate but I think both are okay just as long as the celebrant is happy. 

Thank you for making an effort in answering your homework for today. You did an awesome job! I'm so proud of you. Please read all the corrections I wrote down below and analyze them. I know you can do it. Soon!

I'll not have a big birthday party even if I can have a big birthday party.
>> I'll not have a big birthday part even if I had the chance to do so. 

Actually, I don't like having a big party even if it is really fun.
>> Actually, I don't like parties even if it's really fun. 

So every birthday, I just have a birthday party in the house with my few friends.
>> So every birthday, I just have a small party at my house with my new friends. 

The reasons of unliking big party are two reasons.
>> There are 2 reasons why I don't like big parties. 

First, I don't like the place that lots of people are there.
>> First, I don't like places that has lots of people.

Second, if I'm going to have a big birthday party, I have to know lots of people for inviting to my big birthday party, but I don't know very very lots of people.
>>Second, if I'm going to have a big birthday party, I have to know lots of people to invite. The problem is I don't know lots of people. 

Thats why I want to have a big birthday party even if I can have a big birthday party.
>>That's why 'll not have a big birthday part even if I had the chance to do so. 

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