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The best memory I have in school

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I think all memories are so memorable for me. The best memory is just eating snacks at school playing games. I didn¡¯t think that those are special things but I realize that it was valuable memory. I think every moment was the best memory.

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Hi Heidi! School days have a lot memories that we can cherish in a lifetime. That's usually the time where you would meet the people that would have a big role in your life. It's nice that you still remember a part of it:). Make more memories that you can look back at in the future. 

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I think all memories are so memorable for me. 
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The best memory is just eating snacks at school playing games. 
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I didn¡¯t think that those are special things but I realize that it was valuable memory. 
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I think every moment was the best memory.
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